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From: guest (Blackdaw)
, 86 months, post #1 |
Steamrolled and her wonderful comic have returned to Deviantart.
Just wanted to say, I love the angle with the recent strip. The two
waitresses having their sexuality swapped with the perverted old
man and boy is just a really hot idea. Would love to see more like
it.
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From: guest (leon)
, 86 months, post #2 |
I agree, I love swaps that involve out of character behavior, even
though if it's just a mental swap thing.
I also noticed someone with the name BlackDaw has added some
chapters to a certain popular writing.com interactive. Could that
be you by any chance?
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From: guest (Blackdaw)
, 86 months, post #3 |
Sometimes mental swaps are the best, I love it when the person
finds out about the swap, but due to their new sexuality, are only
more turned on by the revelation. It's great too when they have no
idea what's happened to them, but happily live out their new lives.
And yeah, that's me working on I Know That Ghost! Hope you've liked
it, let me know what you think! I don't know if I'm conveying some
of these scenes and ideas well, so I'd love some feedback!
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From: guest (leon)
, 86 months, post #4 |
Honestly, I'm very much impressed with your writing. I liked your
approach on the memory aspect; how Jezzer discovers his new
memories, and that particular recalling of a previous encounter
between the two was just great. I can't quite put my finger on what
makes it different, but the discovery of his powers and how he
experiments to find his limits was also fun to read. And the
details about the car was surprising, you don't usually expect that
level of characterization, and I think it adds a great
deal to the story. This is the level I'd consider quality work. I
hope you continue that path, I know a lot of people here would
appreciate it. (Just look at the comments here to Frosty's
contributions to that interactive. Perhaps you're actually using a
different alias?)
My only criticism for that interactive was not allowing Jezzer to
use his powers in more diverse situations, and stick to a small
number of local characters. I should add that I love how that
allows a more detailed characterization, and I get the argument
that less is more, but to have him jump around different bodies and
explore a bigger variety of identities they offer, and even
engaging in that same ooc behavior, would be a lot more intriguing.
This is just my opinion though.
In any case, I'll keep an eye out on where you take the story.
Great work!
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From: guest (Blackdaw)
, 86 months, post #5 |
Thank you so much for your kind words! I've enjoyed writing it so
far. I found that Frosty and JR didn't give as much attention to
the mechanics of Jezzer's powers as they could have. It's something
that I'm gonna enjoy exploring. The liquor store encounter between
the two was fun to write, and I'm gonna try to come up with more
examples where Jezzer gets to remember how much he disliked and
lusted after Rebecca, as well as getting her side of the story. I'm
glad i've gotten across the mind stuff well. As for the details, I
find it's that kind of thing that lets a story breath, and showing
Jezzer disrupt the family dynamic is sort of the point of the story
I guess. Well I hope people do like it, as fucked up as it is. And
no, I'm not Frosty, if that's what you're saying :P
As for the amount of characters I have in mind, I do plan on it
being a bit of a slow expansion. I plan on using a few new
characters, as well as some that are already constant within other
threads within the story. I can almost guarantee I won't have
Jezzer going to the mall and switching around a dozen times within
a few chapters, those kinds of interactive are not quite as
enjoyable for me. I'd like to see Jezzer become pretty intimate
with a few women, using them at first to get to Tim but coming to
appreciate them for the simple fact that they're fun to be.
In terms of 'diverse situations', what do you mean, though? I have
a few ideas where he might jump into someone to help himself or Tim
in some way, but those will probably be pretty minor circumstances,
like getting a cop to let Rebecca out of a speeding ticket or
something. For the most part, the possession action is gonna be
centered around a number of busty babes, as those are Jezzer's
favorite targets, as well as part of the reason I've started
writing this stuff. It is a fetish, after all! Lol.
Thanks for the feedback!
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From: guest (mad charles)
, 86 months, post #6 |
Not sure how many noticed, but in the comments section of the
newest page there is a preview of what may come in the future.
http://sta.sh/0vjwjtqlrz3
Also, it looks like she is going to be making a patreon account
which will have an intro comic.
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From: guest (Blackdaw)
, 86 months, post #7 |
Yeah I saw that. Interesting stuff, looks like she's having lots of
fun with it.
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From: guest
, 86 months, post #8 |
Super hot. Hope we see more of those waitresses as well. I like her
new art style a lot, you can tell she's been developing it.
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From: guest
, 86 months, post #9 |
I just read the addition to IKTG.... My god BlackDaw, it's so
dirty... But so good....
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From: guest (leon)
, 86 months, post #10 |
@Blackdaw
The cop example is very much what I was thinking. I understand the
argument that it can turn out to be a clutter of unrefined
characters in and out the story, which would constantly shift
focus, and that wouldn't be as exciting as exploring a character in
a more comprehensive manner, like you seem to be doing. My issue
was about how the focus stayed
on the same characters for a long period of time where actually
nothing significant happens, and past a certain point that makes
the story and the characters themselves repetitive. I know some
people actually prefer that repetitiveness, and it's not my cup of
tea, but I get that. I have no issue with the family dynamic, as
it's basically considered the gist of the story at this point. Just
wishing to see a bit more variety, perhaps with other characters
that would enrich the story, and not cause clutter as some authors
have done to several interactives, which basically killed them
imho. Minor encounters could be a perfect way to employ that. I'm
not really a writer, so you may disregard that answer I gave too
early in the morning in that other thread, about the ideas
suggested. Basically, I wanted to see Jezzer explore more.
With what you said about the attention to the mechanics, and about
your ideas, I don't think it's too early to say you seem to know
exactly what you're doing. I'm hooked.
And I feel like I hijacked this thread, so here's a clickable link
to the Steamrolled's deviantart stash:
http://sta.sh/0vjwjtqlrz3
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From: guest (Guest)
, 86 months, post #11 |
I started the thread on JohnG/JR verison of the story.
I was surprised when someone updated the story. It bothers me that
I cant leave any comments on the chapters on Writing.com like you
can in FM.
I honestly dont want to bombard this thread out of the original
focus but im not sure if i should start a new thread.
First of all, I want to thank you for adding to the story. I think
you did a remarkable job adding characterization with the detailed
memory recalling.
I especially loved the taunting Jeezer does to Rebecca.
I can't wait to hear Jeezer's his inner monologue and taunts while
impersonating Rebecca and etc. I especially want to see the
conscious Rebecca trap in her own mind watching and Jeezer taunting
her in her head as she slowly turns into Jeezer's main
puppet.(Which you foreshadowed, really great job btw)
I think the memory recall can be done with less work. First two
times were awesome but the I think you can ease up on the
insignificant memories later by just giving the general outline of
it. Unless its information that You deem worthy.(Its your story! Do
whatever you want with it! :D) It can serve as a shortcut and avoid
stress. I really dont want another writer burnt themselves out :(.
I understand Leon want diversity but in all honestly, it will take
a lot of effort by one person and its just gonna be messy with the
story being stagnated. So for me, I totally concure with your
reasoning. I think switching settings can already avoid the
stagnation, it leads to natural minor characters being introduced
which in turn leads to more options. It only works in Jeezer's pov,
cause Tim's pov is limited without Jeezer since Tim cant do
anything lol.
The modifications alone can already keep the story interesting as
it progress without the need for extra characters. The process
should take some effort and time. Less so for the other 3 but
Rebecca should take longer since Jeezer is decided she is going to
be his new body.
im writing too much.. so last point! Sorry^^
I think i can give a suggestion on how the indoctrination works.
Ive read in a book series where the villian can influence the
victims in their mind by speaking in their own inner monologue and
giving them suggestions in the characters thoughts. The more time
Jeezer spent in one body, the more control he has. Its pretty cool
in the book, the characters didnt realize her/his other inner voice
was the villian the entire time. She thought it was his brother's
teaching that left his voice inside her head as her instinct.
Once again, thanks for writing and hope to see more! I really
enjoyed the recent chapters you added.
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From: barackobrahma
, 86 months, post #12 |
@Blackdaw
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which book?
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From: guest (Blackdaw)
, 86 months, post #13 |
@Leon
Don't worry, I have a few character and little events in mind, it
won't all be sex and smut. That being said, the majority of the
focus will be on a few 'main' characters. I plan on taking a
similar angle that JR and Frosty took, that is, not cutting a whole
lot of time out of the story. While I'm not sure that I agree that
the original thread was repetitive, I think I've taken a different
spin. So I guess we'll see if it fits with what you're hoping for,
can't promise anything though. I really like a lot of the
characters already in the story, but there are a few others I'm
gonna throw in there. Maybe they'll mix things up enough for you.
@guest11
I'm happy to chat about this story, you guys seem to have some neat
ideas. I'm not game for everything that's thrown out of course, but
it helps to talk about some of this. If you feel like making
another thread, go for it.
Glad you like it. I'm getting a kick out writing Jezzer as so
vulgur. It's hard to describe, but the way he is demeaning her is
really erotic for me. Trying to think of ways to do it so as to not
make it repetitive. That's messed up but hey, it's a story about a
homeless guy possessing big-chested women...
Yeah I'm looking forward to finally getting him to perform as his
new identity around other people, especially Tim and Heather. I
think you're right, that will provide good opportunity for Jezzer
to further insult her, I'm sure he'll be quite smug as he parades
her around. As for this second point, I had a similar idea, but I'm
now sure when and how I would introduce this mechanic. I feel like
the pay off would be better if Jezzer simply had her forget most of
the things he does while inside her body, to start with. That way I
could play with her behaviour changing in subtle ways and
not-so-subtle ways due to his influence at first, while she's
totally unaware she's being manipulated. I don't know, the order of
events is still a little murky for me.
As for the memory, I will partially agree, in that the memory scene
in the masturbation chapter was a bit clunky. I knew that when I
submitted the chapter, but there were a few pieces of info and
characterization in there that I felt were still important enough
to leave in. I think I'm going to avoid the memory thing in a scene
involving any kind of action from now on, simply because it breaks
the pace.
As for me 'burning out', well, this is literally the first time
i've tried writing erotica. I won't promise that i'll add with
anything near the frequency that Frosty and JR were doing at one
point, but I would like to keep working on it.
Your points on diversity are pretty close to my intentions, I want
things to go pretty slowly as opposed to chaotically. Though I do
plan on switching to Tim's POV at some point soon, just so we can
see at least a little bit of his own internal reaction to what's
happening with his mother and soon, some of the other women around
him.
I agree, seeing Jezzer directly manipulate Rebecca will make this
quite a different story to the original thread I think. I'm not
sure what other 3 you're referring to, though.
Actually I quite like reading what other people think about this
story, i'm pretty new to this so hearing other ideas is quite
helpful. Just don't be surprised when some variation of it appears
in my work. I'm already going to borrow a few things from the main
thread, but I don't think that's a problem, considering the nature
of these interactive stories. Hopefully I make it original enough
to be worth it.
This last idea is pretty cool, I like it a lot. I do think that
something like this would be one of the steps that happens before
the level discussed before, where Rebecca is forced to watch Jezzer
manipulate her body. Having her less directly controlled by Jezzer,
via him just sitting in the back of her brain, is definitely
something I'd like to try. But again, the timeline is something I'm
not set on. As of right now, I'm still getting over Jezzer's second
orgasm :P
Thanks very much for the compliments and feedback. Nice to see that
this community is welcoming, if a little odd.
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From: guest (guest)
, 86 months, post #14 |
@barackobrahma
There's no TG involved in the story. Nor strong focus on mind
control.. well there is but it really isnt the point of the story
and it doesnt even reveal or mentioned until the second and third
book.
Its a great series though, if you are interested without the TG
element.
It's called Mistborn, its first book premise is essentially a heist
in a world where some people can ingest metal and burn it within
their bodies. Different metals enhance or provide power to the
users.
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From: DocVS
, 86 months, post #15 |
Hello everyone,
I just stumbled upon this thread and the praise Blackdaw has been
receiving for his dark and rather enticingly depraved posts on the
IKTG interactive tale on Writing.com. The conversation between
everyone really piqued my interest, so I decided to go ahead and
read Blackdaw's excerpt.
What else can I say but: WOW. I was thoroughly engrossed in all the
sordid, multifaceted details that ol' Jezzer had experienced in his
new persona of Rebecca Gately. Blackdaw basically wrote a wonderful
narrative that covered practically most common aspects/themes
inherent in a transgender-oriented possession tale, but also turned
it on its head and around. It definitely made me rethink the whole
possession idea (which is still my first love when it comes to a TG
fictional universe, hence my own 1st love of stories involving
bodyhoppers or spirithoppers).
And I guess I need to make special mention on the delightfully
demented taunting scene/roleplay of Jezzer and "Rebecca", using a
modality that is a part of my own "twisted" (hint hint) well being.
Of course, that scene stood out the most to me. That is actually a
rather unique and comprehensive excerpt where the voice swapping
isn't just a plot device, but rather has a place as a newfound
"power" or "ability" which both confuses Jezzer (at first) but then
excites him in a way he never could have dreamed. Would Jezzer
continue to utilize this in future installments? Only the talented
Blackdaw can answer that question for me.
I will admit, as a captioner, some of my own work has involved a
"dialogue" inside one body, but this certainly took it to a new and
exciting level. It honestly has given me my own ideas and
inspiration for future captions.
Finally, this is a message to not just Blackdaw but all the members
of this thread, aka the "possession" lovers and lovers of a good
"dark tale." It really is awesome that there is just this unique
and accepting community of like-minded people who can suggest,
argue, and critique this topic/interest. For me, it holds such a
special place in my own mind, enough that I too would enjoy
contributing to the discourse. It often gets busy in real life for
me, so it becomes hard to be "in the moment", but honestly I never
stop thinking about what more ideas I can do to further "enhance"
or "twist" (yes I said it again) this little niche of a genre in TG
fiction, whether through my captions or stories. Everyone here
seems very approachable and I think could provide some great
insight, or at least we can just chat about why we love TG
possession-based stories and themes so much. If any of ya'll would
like to just communicate via e-mail, I would sincerely welcome it -
just another way all of us can show appreciation for a genre we
have a common ground, love, and respect for.
Thanks!
DocVS
docvs2010@gmail.com
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From: guest (leon)
, 86 months, post #16 |
@everyone
Just wanted to notify you guys, Guest #11 has (quite rightly) moved
the discussion about the interactive to the original IKTG thread,
and I posted my ramblings over there:
https://metamorphose.org/thread/show.htp?threadid=20628&page=3&se0=thread&se1=show
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From: guest (Morphan)
, 86 months, post #17 |
Getting this discussion back on track about Steamrolled's update,
of which there has been yet another page added to the "New
girlfriend with ray gun" storyline. This one has two separate TG
headswap bits in it. No doubt we're going to see more of the people
affected as the whole point of the swaps is for Eve to study and
write a paper about them. One notable inclusion to the storyline
has Eve's uh... boyfriend, now being given a bracelet that allows
him to perceive the changes too. Although only the ones Eve makes.
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